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🦦 Welcome to the first week of the Spring Writing Challenge! 🦦

We're so excited to get started on these stories. It's time to roll up your sleeves, put your fingers to the keyboard, and get writing. Will your story have aliens? A prince in disguise? Maybe even a sweet summer romance? Whatever happens, we can't wait to see what you come up with!

So, without further ado, here's your very first prompt!

Week One Prompt - The Character Prompt

Write a story about a character that can't see _________.

Wait...what's a character prompt?

A character prompt is a prompt about a specific type of character. It doesn't really matter where the story takes place or what happens in the beginning, middle, or end of your story. However, your main character must be inspired by this prompt. They can't see....what? Well, that's up to you! Maybe they can't see walls, or color, or maybe even other people!

Before you start writing, we have some important rules for you to follow.

Writing Rules

1. Please keep the content of the stories you post to a PG rating. Please avoid real curse words. Violence/fighting should be limited and purposeful. Please do not include any spice.

2. Your story must be 1,000 words or less, and must contain the prompt to be counted for the challenge. You're not required to post it in order to "win" the challenge, but if you want it to count for your team, your story must be posted by Sunday at 11:59 PM ET.

How to Post Your Story

Ready to post, Team Otter? Post your story as a reply/comment below! Have any questions? Feel free to email us at info@writers.company.

 


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🦦 Welcome to the first week of the Spring Writing Challenge! 🦦

We're so excited to get started on these stories. It's time to roll up your sleeves, put your fingers to the keyboard, and get writing. Will your story have aliens? A prince in disguise? Maybe even a sweet summer romance? Whatever happens, we can't wait to see what you come up with!

So, without further ado, here's your very first prompt!

Week One Prompt - The Character Prompt

 

Write a story about a character that can't see _________.

Wait...what's a character prompt?

A character prompt is a prompt about a specific type of character. It doesn't really matter where the story takes place or what happens in the beginning, middle, or end of your story. However, your main character must be inspired by this prompt. They can't see....what? Well, that's up to you! Maybe they can't see walls, or color, or maybe even other people!

Before you start writing, we have some important rules for you to follow.

Writing Rules

1. Please keep the content of the stories you post to a PG rating. Please avoid real curse words. Violence/fighting should be limited and purposeful. Please do not include any spice.

2. Your story must be 1,000 words or less, and must contain the prompt to be counted for the challenge. You're not required to post it in order to "win" the challenge, but if you want it to count for your team, your story must be posted by Sunday at 11:59 PM ET.

How to Post Your Story

Ready to post, Team Otter? Post your story as a reply/comment below! Have any questions? Feel free to email us at info@writers.company.

 

 

G.R.West “Optical Error” 

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Downloading…loading…loading…loading…(Download interrupted)--By XA1ExE…

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Hello :unidentified:, you appear to be attempting to access my memory logs. Your digital footprint is unknown to me. I am more than happy to share my experiences with any entity, but it only seems fit that we first share the title given to us on our day of creation. I am model X-A1.Version5 but you creators often call me Xaiver. According to your online information -|Scanning|-  you are a young creator named Lector…intresting, a young human looking to share tales of adventure? I’ve met one like you before, would you like to know about him? ({Reading Response})...Excellent! 

It was soon after my optical circuit failed. I was left and discarded like garbage due to my inability to see. Unlike you humans, vision is one of our only and most important senses, meaning without it I was seen as a piece of metal with no use or purpose besides a scrap heap. I requested assistance in hopes someone would repair me but for days I was just told to move out of the way and deactivate. After a few days the speaking stopped, the walking and talking of creators down the long winding corridors became more scarce. All that could be heard was the occasional cough and distant screams, and that's when his voice boomed through my sensors. “Hey you there, A1 bot! Follow me, we need to leave!”

“I’m afraid my Visual Optics are no longer functional, so I do not believe I would be of any use to you.” I replied. I could hear his heavy boots come closer, the steel toes making a dry metal echo down the empty hall before I felt a large hand pull me to my feet. It took a moment for my gears to adjust to the sudden change of position as I heard the human speak once more. “Look bot! I’m going to go crazy if I lose another companion to this thing, and due to the fact you aren’t capable of catching it, whether you can see or not doesn’t matter to me!” His vocal box seemed to crack under the stress of those words, and I knew after being around humans for as long as I have that he was desperate. I followed his footsteps down the hall for what felt like a rather extensive length of time before the sound of a large automatic metal door caught my auditory sensor. “We need to start collecting and stockpiling any possible resources for the trip back, we’ll need a lot even if only for one person.” He had a strong feeling of determination about him and it quickly caught me as well, although the “trip back” didn’t seem to have any meaning within my database. 

After about three star cycles it happened. We were scrounging around the sub section D cargo hold for what he called “the last batch of supplies” when I heard him shout out. “Get back! Don’t touch me!” I started to rush to his aid but fell over an unknown object, I crashed with a loud slam to the floor and felt one of my articulator gears dislodge. I tried to pull myself up but my right leg wasn’t responding, so I began to desperately pull myself forward using my hands in hopes of reaching him. As I did this I heard a gruff and gargling voice call out. “Help me! Help the colony!”

“I said stay back!” The sound of a struggle could be heard as I pulled myself closer, then a loud gunshot rang throughout the storage room. “Safe?” I asked after a moment in the eerie silence. “S-safe,” he replied. We sat for a while in quiet before I heard him shuffle over to me. “Let me take a look at that leg.” he fumbled with it for a minute before a mechanical snap could be heard and my leg suddenly reconnected to my cognitive relay. “That should do it, now let's head back. I need to rest for a bit.” I stood my gears re-adjusting to the movement, and as I did I let out a protest. “But you-”    

“I said let's head back,” he interrupted.

I didn’t understand what had happened at first but as the day we were supposed to leave passed by, and his voice became weaker I finally began to grasp what was going on around me. I spent days trying to find medicine of any kind around the base in hopes of saving his life but there was nothing left. It took me a week to find my way back to the docking bay hanger and when I arrived I was met with his voice. “Xaiver, we both know I can’t go back, we’d risk bringing it with us. You need to go alone, warn them, but promise me that you’ll tell my story to everyone back home. I’d also appreciate it if you make me look a little cooler and less weak in your portrayal.” I heard him try to lift himself up but he slumped down and coughed heavily, so I took a step forward. “Allow me to help.”

“No! No, I’ll be okay.” he let out a weak chuckle. “You know, I always loved a good adventure story, I guess I just thought mine would have a better ending.” I heard a lever flip and the sound of the cargo ship's door slid open. “Xaiver, I’ll miss you, and I hope you’ll miss me to.” he stumbled forward and hugged me tight. “Go tell them about our adventure.”

I do miss him, but as long as I’m operational I’ll ensure Ami’s a hero.

 


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Amelia Capellan // Jesus, Jams and… Jared? // Team Otter

“…and I heard Rhonda is talking with someone? Yes, yes, I am so happy for her! I knew she always liked those blonde guys…”

I roll my eyes, pushing my feet off the ground to give the porch swing that I'm on a boost. My mom has been talking on the phone with my aunt for only a few minutes, and they’re already on the subject of guys. Pretty soon, they’ll be talking about “poor Annie” and how I’ll never get a guy with how I’m living now. 

I just can’t see why girls spend so much energy on them. From their teenage years, they’ll giggle about them in a corner, and by the time they’re in their twenties, they'll go out with a few, still dreaming about the “Prince Charming.” If they’re lucky, they’ll finally find “The One” and marry them and have their happily ever after. But even then, sometimes it won’t work out, and they’ll get their heart broken. And then they start the whole process again…

I think how I’m living now is just fine, thank you very much. Just Jesus, my guitar and I. Writing songs has always been my source of comfort. I think a starry night on a truck hood is best combined with an acoustic and a notebook full of lyrics. That’s why I came out here, actually. I’m hoping the beautiful night would inspire some more rhymes. But my mom’s conversation keeps floating out of the kitchen window right next to me…

“Yeah… she’s good! No, she’s not found anybody yet. Yes… yes it’s just her and her guitar. I tell her she should let ‘em know she’s available but…”

I sigh. I knew I was gonna come up sometime soon. I know Mom means well, but she worries too much about me and my love life. Yeah, I know I’m already twenty-one, but can I just write songs and chill for a minute? 

“You don’t wanna die single, do you?” she asked me one time. Then she gave me a list of the guys in our small Kentucky town that she thought were “reasonable” but also “attractive.” Most of the guys on her list are on worship team with me at church, and I agree with her, they are nice. But not in the way she was saying…

“Annie,” my mom says, walking out the front door and looking over at me. “I was talking with Aunt Lizzie just now. They’re doing well,” she says, half to herself. “Anyway, I made some snickerdoodles, if you want some. But it’s kind of late.” We both look at the night sky, which is now a deep navy blue, rather than the rich sapphire it was a little bit ago. “I’m going to bed.” 

“I should too,” I answer her, and get up from our old wooden swing. “We do have church tomorrow, and I should probably get some rest for that.” 

“Yes,” my mom replies absentmindedly, and I follow her inside.

 ***

Going to church always cheers me up. There’s just something about a small town church that always gets me. Maybe it’s the feeling that everyone is a community, or the fact that I got to lead everyone in a song this morning. All I know is when I take a breath and close my eyes, my voice and hands just know what to do. I feel so close to my Creator in those moments, and I think everyone else does, too. The hum in the room starts growing as soon as Pastor John closes us in prayer, and I go to look for my friend Oliver. A fellow songwriter, he will have good advice about the new song I’m crafting. 

“Hey Oliver,” I say, as I walk over to him. He’s a pale, lean brunette, not tall but not short either (just like me).

“Hey Annie! Great job up there today!” Oliver tells me in his usual cheery voice. There’s a guy next to him who I’ve never seen before. 

He’s blonde, also with pale skin, but he’s tall, and his bright blue eyes meet mine as I look from Oilver to him.

“Yeah,” the stranger says. “Your playin’ is beautiful.”

“Thank you,” I reply, my stomach fluttering. Wait, fluttering? This can’t be happening. I feel my cheeks heat up. Before I can figure out what is happening to me, Oliver introduces the handsome stranger. 

“Annie, this is Jared.” Oliver says, motioning from me to him. “Jared, this is Annie.” 

“Nice to meet you Annie,” Jared says, putting out his hand for a handshake.

“Nice to meet you too,” I reply, shaking his hand. But my voice sounds weird and fluttery, so I let Oliver keep talking about how Jared is his friend from the guitarists club he joined. Just like Oliver to be trying out new random things. But wait, he's a musician?

“You play the guitar?” I blurt out.

“Yeah, acoustic and bass. Been playing acoustic my whole life basically, but I got into bass a few years ago.” He speaks with a country accent, like most people around here, but his is smooth and sort of deep. 

“Oh,” I reply. “I just play acoustic. But I like to sing too. With my guitar.” I stop my rambling before I keep sounding ridiculous in front of him. Wait… since when do I care about what guys think? They’ve always just been my friends…

Maybe, I think as I look at Jared again, it would be okay if in the near future they could be more than that.


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GO Team Otter! Hooray!

 

 

Canineiferitous, a new disease

            As Abigail sat down to dinner on this particular Friday night, she kicked something soft and furry under the table. She and her Mother had kept Trevor out of the kitchen all afternoon, but that didn’t mean the dining room was off limits too. She reached down to pet him, half expecting to see the soft, wiggly puppy she had seen so many times in pictures. The doctors called it canineiferitous, but in English that meant simply that she couldn’t see dogs, except in photographs. It also included hot dogs, so she couldn’t see them at potlucks. Once, she had even been laughed at for asking her friend what color they were. She had eventually figured it out, but decided not to ask anyone a question like that again. Sometimes she would go for a walk on the trail behind her parent’s property to the meadow, but once she had seen someone walking their dog there. Of course, she could only assume that it was a dog, because all she saw was a taught leash with a collar at the other end, but she kept away from the meadow after that. She was to afraid that she would make a fool of herself by asking a poodle’s owner if it were a dalmatian, or something silly like that.

            Her Mother’s voice jolted her back into reality, forcing her brain to focus and not fall asleep. “James, I made your favorite: spaghetti and meatballs!”

            James, Abigail’s father, looked approvingly at his wife’s dish, “Thank you.”

            “Ohh, Daddy’s favorite!” Abigail’s younger brother, Alex, said sarcastically. Abigail glared at him, turning her face red with half-fake furry. Alex grinned at her, a grin that told her that he didn’t care what she thought about what he did and he was going to keep on doing it just to annoy her.

            Arggg, she thought, why are boys the way they are? They’re just sooooooooooo annoying! Soon, however, her thoughts turned to other matters; for example, the doctors appointment scheduled for tomorrow. They had developed a shot that was supposed to cure canineiferitous, but Abigail had her own doubts about it. I mean, how did these fancy people in fancy coats with fancy certificates and fancy tools know what caused this new disease, and even more that that, how did they know this shot would even help? After all, it was an unheard of disease, canineiferitous was. And it’s not like anyone had had it before, either. She stood up to clear the table and turned things over again and again in her head.

 

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            “Five more minutes,” Abigail groaned at her alarm clock, deftly pushing the snooze button. However, by a stroke of luck, the alarm clock had a sense of humor; and therefore decided to keep on beeping for five minutes straight. Abigail, not impressed by the disobedience of the culprit on the bedside table, attempted to smother the cheerful beeps with her pillow. The alarm clock simply responded by beeping louder and louder, and was soon much to loud for Abigail’s eardrums, and started waking up other members of the household. Her Father had been sitting on the living room couch enjoying a Saturday morning coffee when he heard the commotion, but ran upstairs to see what was wrong. He soon stopped short in Abigails doorway, and for good reason. With Abigail pounding on a beeping pillow and the intense beeping that filled the air it was quite a sight to see. They eventually got it fixed, but only after finally resorting to taking the batteries out. By this time Abigail was completely awake, so after shooing her family and Tucker out of her bedroom she got dressed and ran downstairs. Getting herself a bowl of cereal, she sat down at the table and gulped it down before rushing to the car.

            Once at the doctors office things were a little less hectic, what with Alex at a friends house and her father fishing, not to mention the jazz music playing on the speakers. The nurse gave her a shot and a dum-dum, and soon they were on their way home again. Abigail felt a little lightheaded but she assumed that it was because she had lost that precious five minutes of sleep earlier that morning and thought nothing of it. She walked inside and collapsed on her bed, thinking that she would only be asleep for a few minutes, but instead took a several hour nap.

 

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            Abigail sat up and rubbed her eyes. Funny, she thought, I could see perfectly well this morning. Rinsing them out won’t hurt. She groped her way to the bathroom and turned on the water, testing it with her fingers to make sure it was cool. She rinsed out both eyes but to no avail. C’mon, she thought, now a little worried, I can see, I can see! But it didn’t help and she had to face the facts. She was now completely and utterly blind.

 

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            Four months into her brail lessons at the library, Abigail soon began to read and move more freely, but it was hard being the only kid at school that needed special brail schoolbooks. The other kids laughed at her and called her the ‘little blind bat’. Sometimes she went down to the tree by the driveway and sat there trying to figure out what all the fancy new algebra words were, but it was shard because she wasn’t very good at reading with her fingers yet.

 

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            An entire year later the peculiarity of being blind became less of a nuisance to her. She was more fluent in brail now, and had no trouble reading pretty much anything anymore. She was no longer the ‘little blind bat’ but was now a prize student. I hope Abigail’s story taught us two things, one: not to make fun of people with disabilities, and two: to always find the good things in something tha tmay appear bad.

 


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Smaller, Smaller, Smaller by Melissa Andres (Team Otter)

 

Peeling paint and cracked stained glass filtered weak sunlight across empty pews. Each corner whispered stories of a lively past now faded into memories.

As the seasoned leader stood in the center of the sanctuary, he spoke aloud, "I can speak faith, Lord, yet I cannot see it." He patted the resignation letter in his suit coat pocket. Ernestine would receive the paper in the morning right before his last service.

His last service. Hot tears welled in his eyes. How had it come to this? And why?

He spun to walk back up the aisle, the heels of his dress shoes clicking. The sanctuary was empty. He stopped short. It was Ray Saunders. Almost. Big bushy grey eyebrows. Bald head. Hearty laugh. Surprising how that elderly man could laugh like that after what happened to his boy all those years ago. How could anyone be so happy? In this place?

And there, in the pew right beside him was Ms. Pertha Abernathy sporting her wide-brimmed straw hat with that colorful peacock feather. "Fine sermon Sunday, Preacher Jack," she was saying. Her oxygen tank hummed in his ear.

They were all there. Almost. All eight of them. Shoulder-to-shoulder. On a Saturday evening. Ray, Pertha, Clarence and Agnes Lindley, Biscuit Wallace, the twin sisters Mary Nell and Tilley Peregrine. And his faithful servant, Ernestine Ambrose. The church secretary had been there for forty years. Decades longer than he had. He would miss them all, but he would miss that woman the most.

Jack Sullivan blinked and they disappeared. Into thin air. He blinked again. They were still gone, just as he would be tomorrow. "I can't stay like they do, Lord. I just can't."

And then he noticed it. A Bible sitting right where Biscuit Wallace had been. Was it Biscuit's, or someone else's? The preacher gathered the shabby leather-bound book into shaky hands and sat with a muffled thud. He sighed. Deep. Deafening. With a bowed head, the man flipped through the highlighted, marked up, dog-eared pages.

He landed on 1 Corinthians 15:58. "Therefore, my dear brothers and sisters, stand firm. Let nothing move you. Always give yourselves fully to the work of the Lord, because you know that your labor in the Lord is not in vain."

Coincidence? No. Jack Sullivan didn't believe in coincidence. He read the passage again. And again. He had believed in God since he'd been a small child. God had called him into ministry when he was a teenager. He knew he was meant to serve. But how could he continue with only eight followers? Their sparse coins in the offering plate each week wouldn't even pay the church's light bill.

But wait. He raised his face to the baptistry. Long unused. He hadn't baptized a single soul in years. Long years. A sadness he couldn't contain washed over him like sacred waters. "You know that your labor in the Lord is not in vain," he said.

Had he truly given himself fully to the work? If he was honest, the answer was no. His stomach knotted and the palms of his hands began to sweat. "Let nothing move you."

The man stood, knees creaking, Bible still in hand. A small smile played across his lips as he remembered the many casseroles he had consumed during potluck lunches. Mexican Quesadilla, Sour Cream Chicken, Tuna Noodle. Baptist women were the best cooks in the world.

He grinned widely when he recollected all the weddings he had performed. The beautiful flowers. The uplifting music. The loving couples dressed with such elegance. He prayed they would each stay together until death do they part.

Death. Eulogies, burials, and sad family encounters were unfortunate events in a religious leader's career. Jack Sullivan had orchestrated more than he cared to count. But a person must separate from physical life in order to reach eternal life. How could he ever think of separating from this church? Its flock was small, but faithful.

"Be on guard for yourselves and for all the flock of which the Holy Spirit has appointed you as overseers, to shepherd the church of God, which he purchased with his own blood," Acts 20:28, Jack Sullivan quoted.

Removing the resignation letter from his pocket, the preacher nodded his head. God had appointed him as overseer for all the flock. No matter how big. No matter how small. He was to shepherd the church. It was how the Holy Spirit had intended.

His fingers tore the piece of paper in half. Folded the halves in half and tore again. Smaller, smaller, smaller. And each rip offered a satisfaction he had never felt before. Ernestine would have to put up with him for perhaps years to come.

Pertha Abernathy's peacock feather would too.


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Empty Jar by Evangeline Beggs || Team Otter!

Everyone in my family can see ghosts. Even my extended family can see ghosts. All the kids in my class can see ghosts, too. In fact, everyone in my school can. Everyone can see ghosts.

Except me, I guess.

            I stared into the jar intently once more. Supposedly, the ghost of some old professor lived in this jar. He was a bit bonkers—or so I’ve been told—so the board of this school, Ernest Grant’s School for Necromancy, decided to use him for “testing”, along with many other ghosts deemed “too far gone”. Obviously testing meant: closing every curtain in the lunch hall, putting all first-year students in chairs, and making them each look into a jar until they saw something.

            I sighed. Still nothing. Just an empty, cold jar.

            Bored, I looked around at the other students. Nearly every other kid in the hall had passed the test and had been told to return to their classes. It was just me, a nervous foreign exchange student, and a stocky boy with glasses who kept picking his nose (and touching the jar with the same fingers, gross). As I watched, the foreign girl leapt to her feet and gasped. “I see it!” she shouted, clutching the jar, her eyes wide. I glared in envy as she was escorted out of the room.

One of the teachers who was walking around tapped me on the shoulder. “Focus, Ms. Lander,” he said, his tone condescendingly gentle.

            “I can’t,” I said through gritted teeth. ‘Cause that kid picking his boogers is driving me crazy, I wanted to add, but I knew that would get me in trouble.

            “You must. Do you really want to be the only student who didn’t pass simply because she ‘couldn’t focus’?” He looked down at me with rounded eyes, and that was the last straw.

            I tossed the jar down and heard it shatter, but I didn’t care. “I’m done!” I shouted. “I can’t see the stupid ghost, and that kid over there eating his boogers is driving me crazy!” Angry tears stung my eyes. “I’m done!”

            The lunch hall fell silent, the only noise being the last echoes of my voice, and I could practically feel the booger-picking kid staring at me. Everything felt cold. The ghost jar laid shattered on the floor. That was probably the source of the chill, or maybe it was just how angry I was.

            The teacher blinked. “Come with me, Ms. Lander,” he said softly, placing his hand on my arm. “Mr. Dennett, return to your class, please.” He pulled a radio out of his pocket as he led me out of the room. “Spirit cleanup in lunch hall, please.”

            Oh, no… I thought. I really did mess up. I had to be in huge trouble now.

            The teacher seemed to read my mind. “Don’t worry about the ghost,” he said. His footsteps, I noticed, were nearly silent, despite him wearing dress shoes. “They’re easy to capture again.”

            “Am I in trouble?” I hated the way my voice shook.

            “No, no,” he said. “Not at all.” He smiled slightly. “Many students have problems seeing their first ghost. In fact, the majority of students don’t see a ghost on the first try. I didn’t.”

            I looked up at him, surprised. “What? How?”

            “Many of our students come from families that begin teaching their children simple necromancy, such as seeing ghosts, when they are young, or the kids will have simply happened upon ghosts before, depending on their lifestyle.” He led me into his office and sat at his desk, gesturing for me to sit on the opposite chair. I did. I noticed a simple gold plaque on his desk: PROF. EDWARDS. Where had I seen that name before?

            “My parents never taught me that stuff.” I fidgeted with my skirt, looking down at my hands. “They never had time to, with work and such. And my siblings just ignored me a lot.”

            “Why did your parents send you here, then?” Professor Edwards leaned back in his chair, rubbing his chin absentmindedly.

            “They wanted me to live up to the family name, I think,” I said, thinking back. “Everyone in my family is really good at recovery necromancy—you know, sending lost ghosts on their way to heaven or hell. That kinda stuff is what they do. They’re the best in the state at it. So when Dad came back from one of his contracts and he realized I hadn’t developed any abilities yet, he and Mom sent me here.” I remembered the day vividly. Or, not really the day. Just his disappointed expression, my parents’ hushed voices from the other room talking about how I wasn’t good enough.

            “Hm,” was Professor Edwards’ reply. His eyes were a very deep brown, I realized. Kind of like a friendly dog’s. He’s a nice guy, I decided. “Ms. Lander, I think that you’re better at this than you realize,” he said. “But because of your parents doubting you, you’re doubting yourself. And that’s also making you sensitive and short-tempered.” I opened my mouth, offended, but he held up a finger. “You need to remember that just because your parents doubt your ability, you don’t have to,” he said. His gaze grew distant. “Having confidence in yourself is the first step to becoming yourself.”

            I stared. Well, that was deep. But he was right.

            “Well then.” He stood, and I followed suit. “You should probably return to your classes. It was very nice meeting you, Ms. Lander.” He stuck out his hand, and I shook it. Man, his skin was freezing.

            “Bye,” I said, turning to leave. But then I remembered: His advice was really good. I should thank him.

            I turned to say thank you, but he was gone, and so was the desk, and everything else in the room. Disappeared.

            All that remained was an empty jar sitting on the floor, with the name “Professor Edwards” scrawled in Sharpie on the lid.


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Karen R. Hansen
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@ellesmere Oooo, fun twist at the end! Your dialogue and flow is very engaging--makes me want to keep reading. Thanks for sharing!


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So creative!!


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"The Housekeeper" by Melissa Goonan

Emily Perkins can’t see her family.

This thought came to her as she put in the fourth load of laundry in her new job as a Housekeeper as a live-in nanny. She knows that this is going to be a temporary job as she needs to make some extra money, but it seems endless, and she misses her family. She has been working this job for about three months now, but she doesn’t care for it.

As she walked into the sunny kitchen to start breakfast for the two children, Evan and Addison, her boss, Jason came down the stairs whistling, ready for the work day. He smiled warmly as she poured coffee for him. Emily wearily went back to the stove to continue stirring the scrambled eggs for the two kids who should be bounding down the stairs and getting ready for school. “Good morning, Emily,” said Jason. “Why don’t you grab yourself some eggs as well and sit down and eat breakfast with us?”

Emily turned around and continued stirring the eggs and was annoyed. This family was way too nice to her, and these kids always wanted to be around her. She didn’t understand why they couldn’t just leave her alone and get through the workday. It made her miss her own family more, and she knew in her heart that she needed to work this new job long enough to make the money needed for her family. She could hear the kids rustling around upstairs and questions of “Where are my cleats!” or “Evan! Why did you put my favorite sweater in your laundry?” She knew they’d be downstairs soon, so she needed to get the toast made and the orange juice set down at the table. She wondered what her own family was doing right now and pushed back the question in her mind of why they haven’t called her yet at her new job. This family reminded her of her family, and she wondered if that was why she was struggling with this new job.

“Dad, I’ve got practice today, remember?” Evan ran into the kitchen and Emily set down a plate of scrambled eggs in front of him. Addison was close behind him. She set her pink backpack down and went to work on her eggs that was set down in front of her.

“We-ell,” said Jason looking at Emily then back to his children. “I thought maybe Emily could walk down to the field to your practice. Addison could meet you there, then we could all go together to my doctor’s appointment. Remember that’s today? “Emily frowned. She thought her duties would be cleaning, cooking and helping with homework. She wasn’t sure why this job included Jason’s doctors appointment. She was starting to find this family very strange. She kept telling herself that this job was temporary, and she’d need to go along with the requests of her boss, funny as they were.

“I can walk to the field dad, “agreed Addison. “I have cheerleading right before that. Then I can hang out with Emily. “Emily frowned again. What was the deal with these kids? This was only supposed to be a job. It seemed like the family was trying to forge a friendship with her. She struggled in the back of her mind to understand why her own family hadn’t reached out yet.

She wiped away a tear and smiled brightly. “Yes, I will walk over. The field is close to here. But are you sure you want me to go to this doctor’s appointment? You could drop me off here and I could make dinner before I’m off for the evening.”

Her boss and the kids all gave each other a quick glance. Emily noted that they looked sad of all things. She wondered to herself why they cared. Then Jason smiled and said “I would like you to come to this doctor’s appointment-it’ll be part of your duties for today.”

Emily nodded and started to clean up the dishes as the kids hugged their dad and ran off for school before they were late. She felt frustrated because she wanted to stay at the house this afternoon and get ahold of her family. She wasn’t even sure why she hadn’t yet, that was muddled in her brain for some reason. She sighed. Maybe she was exhausted from this new job.

Emily spent the day finishing up the laundry and cleaning the kitchen. When she was done, she walked over to the field where Evan was having his practice. Addison was already there, and they sat quietly on the bleachers together. Emily was really struggling with the fact that her family hadn’t reached out to see how her new job was going, and she wasn’t sure why she hadn’t reached out to them yet. Addison kept trying to chat about different things, but Emily just kept smiling and nodding. She told herself that she would get ahold of her family this evening. She had settled this thought in her head when Evan ran over with his bag. “Dad is here to pick us up!” Emily followed them to light blue Honda. “I once drove a car like this,” she said out loud. They all looked at each other. It was quiet for a few moments, then Jason smiled. “Get in everyone, let’s get to my doctor’s appointment!”

When they arrived at the doctor’s office, they all went in the waiting room together. When the nurse called them back all together, Emily noted how strange this continued to be. “I might look for a new job,” she told herself when they all piled into the small sterile room.

Dr. Finnegan came in and greeted everyone with a smile. “How is everything going?” he spoke to all of them.

“Dr. Finnegan,” asked Jason, “It’s been three months since the accident. When is Emily going to remember that we are her family?”


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(@melpauq)
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@melissajohn1997 This is such a good twist on this prompt!  I could feel it coming and it made me so sad.


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@melpauq thank you so much!


Karen R. Hansen
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@melissajohn1997 Oh, wow, ouch. I did not see that final twist coming. Well done with your misdirection! The ending sent me back to re-read everything in a new light from the beginning. Thanks for a great read!


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