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"Where are we?" I say more to myself than Xisul. It's weird. I'm sure I've never set foot here but I feel like there's something familiar. Like I should know this place.
The magnetic field is surprisingly high. It must be the core. Judging by the silver-glint of the planet's surface, along with waves of blue baked into the rock, I wouldn't be surprised if this world was largely made up of cobalt. I whistle.
If the priests of Epiterra knew about this place, they would go beside themselves at the potential to exploit it for its resources. It's not scintilla, but it's still an excellent material for building their fleet of space ships.
But as far as I can tell, this place is undefiled. Not a hint of human touch anywhere except--
I pause. What is that?
I've been to my share of terrestrial bodies throughout the galaxy. And... how do I describe it? Whatever that is, it looks made but not.
And it's breathtaking.
It's not the cobalt in it's raw form that stretches as far as the eye can see, where the light scatters across its surface and creates that metallic, matted look. It's not the way the ground raises upon itself so that it looks like multiple basins cascading one over the other. Almost as if I was approaching a series of giant, naturally made steps. It's not even the way that the atmospheric pressure squeezes highly-charged particles against the planet's surface so that there's this steady neon-like glow that outlines everything.
All of that's beautiful, don't get me wrong, but it's what's at the center, nestled at the topmost stair of the basins. It's blue, and lilac, and, when the light hits it just so, gold or silver, but still transparent. A large crystal wall, buffed but never cut, so that the faces are asymmetrical and unique. On either end is a shimmering cobalt frame that extends about three-quarters of the way up the side.
"Have you ever seen anything like this, Xisul?"
She shakes her head. For once, her mouth is silent. She must be as in awe of this place as I am.
We take a few steps toward the base, hesitant to see if there are any traps that are planned for trespassers. There's no doubt in my mind that this place was built by some culture, perhaps thousands of millennia ago. Maybe the Pre-Moda Era. Had it been built by the priests, the lines would be sharp, smooth, uniform. A reflection of the inexhaustible pursuit of perfection by the hegemony.
No, this looks too raw, too natural and yet... not natural. Hands must have placed this thing here. But why in this remote place so far flung from any civilization in the galaxy? And what for?
I take another step.
"Cobar, be careful."
I grin.
"Worried for me, Xisul?"
"Shut it. If you get hurt, don't think I'm going to save your butt. I'll be on the first beacon out of here."
I cock my head in her direction. "No heroes amongst your people, right?"
She sucks her teeth. "No hero for someone who pokes around unknown structures like a stupid."
I snort. Xisul doesn't mince words with her opinions. It's one of the things I find attractive about her. That and the way her eyes are shaped. I shake my head. Not attractive. Interesting. That's the right word.
I turn back to the structure and start making my way upward.
When I get to the last step, I pause. Nothing has come to kill me yet. That's a good sign.
"Cobar, we should go," she says, her tone strained.
I ignore her and close the gap between me and a small stone alter that is placed strategically in front of the translucent wall. There are no vines or trees that strangle the altar - is it even possible to grow such things here? Regardless, there's only the residue of fine minerals that have dusted the surface. I brush them off with my hand and try to read the inscription.
But it's no language I've ever scene. Not in my years of travel or study.
As I approach the crystal wall, slowly, slowly, something strange happens. It's as if the wall itself comes alive and starts to illuminate.
I can't help myself. I lean forward to touch the crystal and it's like it melts... or flows? It's not hot but it's liquid. I pull my hand back and inspect my glove. It shines, but other than that, there's no residue. Now I'm really curious. I walk around to the side of the crystal where it's framed by the cobalt ore. I try to peer around to see what is behind the stone.
Nothing. Just more of the planet.
What is this material? I inspect the sides again, the altar, the crystal itself. I touch it again and same thing. It melts but doesn't melt.
Why does this seem familiar? And then it hits me.
I've never cared for the stories. Never. I always figured they were just an annoying part of my culture. Legends cooked up by my ancestors to make them feel like they weren't alone in the universe. Myths that alienated me from ever living a normal life with the modded.
But there is one tale that all great-grandfathers spoke of ad nauseam. About one of our forefathers who was cast to the corners of the galaxy where time bended on itself. Rejected and alone, he saw wall of precious stone that was clear. It was there he heard The Voice and made a covenant with the eternal King and worshipped.
I swallow.
But those were just allegories, right? There's no way they could be real. Could they?
Could they?
I take a step back and catch my breath at the thought.
I've just been to the first worship service of the unmodded.


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The Hidden Church
Rain slipped through the broken roof of the church in silver threads, tapping softly against the rotted pews and shattered stone. Ivy crawled up the walls where stained glass once painted saints in ruby and gold. The old bell tower leaned slightly now, as though even it had grown tired of standing watch over forgotten promises.
 
Evelyn stood in the doorway with rain gathered on the shoulders of her coat. For a long moment, she could not move.
 
Twenty years ago, she had walked down this aisle in white satin with trembling hands and hope blooming bright in her chest. The church had smelled of candle wax and roses then. Music had echoed through polished beams. Her husband had waited at the altar with tears in his eyes, smiling like he could not believe someone had chosen him.
 
Now, silence filled the sanctuary.
 
The church had been abandoned for years after a fire damaged part of the roof. No one repaired it. The town built a newer chapel farther down the road, leaving this one hidden behind wild trees and overgrown paths. Time hollowed it out little by little.
Evelyn understood that feeling.
 
She stepped carefully over fallen plaster and walked toward the third pew on the left.
 
Their pew.
 
“Where did we go wrong?” she whispered.
 
The question dissolved into the empty church.
 
She remembered the vows perfectly. Strange, how memory protected certain moments while destroying others. She could still hear Daniel’s voice promising forever. Still feel the warmth of his hand around hers. Still remember believing love alone could survive anything.
 
But love, she had learned, was not a flame. It was a house.
 
And houses needed tending.
 
At first, their marriage had been beautiful in ordinary ways. Sunday mornings, making pancakes together. Dancing barefoot in the kitchen. Long drives with the windows down and no destination in mind. They used to laugh so hard that Evelyn’s ribs hurt.
 
Then life began quietly pulling bricks loose from the foundation.
 
Daniel worked longer hours at the factory after his promotion. Evelyn buried herself in teaching and grading papers late into the night. They stopped eating dinner together. Stopped asking each other how their days had gone.
The first cracks seemed harmless.
 
A forgotten anniversary.
 
A tired “maybe tomorrow.”
 
Tomorrow became months.
 
Months became years.
 
The rain fell harder through the broken ceiling above her. Water dripped steadily into the aisle where she once carried lilies in trembling hands.
 
The church looked exactly like her marriage had felt in the end: neglected, exhausted, slowly collapsing under the weight of silence.
 
No single storm had destroyed this place.
 
It had been abandoned piece by piece.
 
Evelyn swallowed against the ache rising in her throat.
 
She remembered the night Daniel slept on the couch for the first time. Neither of them even recalled the argument later. Something about money, dishes, exhaustion. Yet she remembered standing in the hallway afterward, waiting for him to come back upstairs.
 
He never did.
 
After that, distance became routine.
 
They learned how to move around each other like strangers in a crowded station. Passing without touching. Speaking without meaning anything. This cannot be what forever was supposed to feel like.
 
But neither of them knew how to fix it.
 
A gust of wind swept through the church, stirring dead leaves across the floor. Evelyn looked toward the altar.
 
The cross still stood there somehow.
 
Blackened by smoke, chipped at the edges, but standing.
 
Her chest tightened unexpectedly.
 
She and Daniel had divorced three years ago. No screaming. No betrayal. Just papers signed beneath fluorescent lights while both of them looked unbearably tired. Their marriage had not ended like shattered glass.
 
It ended like a candle slowly running out of flame.
 
That was almost worse.
 
Evelyn reached into her coat pocket and unfolded the photograph she had carried there for weeks. Their wedding day. Daniel smiling at her beneath this very roof. She stared at the younger version of herself — bright-eyed and certain love would remain exactly as it began.
 
“You should’ve fought harder,” she murmured to the woman in the picture.
 
But she no longer knew whether she meant herself or Daniel.
 
For a moment, she imagined him walking through the doorway now, older and grayer, carrying the same regret she did. She wondered if he ever thought about this church. About their vows. About the slow ruin they became.
 
Maybe love did not disappear all at once. Maybe it eroded quietly beneath routine and resentment until one day there was nothing left strong enough to hold the roof together.
Just like this place.
 
Evelyn stood and wandered toward the altar. Tiny weeds pushed through cracks in the stone floor. Nature is reclaiming what people failed to protect.
 
She touched the burned wood gently.
 
Oddly, the church did not feel dead to her.
 
Broken, yes.
 
Lonely.
 
But not dead.
 
Because even in ruins, beauty remained.
 
The rain through the ceiling sounded almost like music. Ivy curled around the windows in graceful green spirals. Candle holders still lined the walls, waiting for light that might never return.
 
Evelyn realized then that she had come here believing she would find answers.
 
Instead, she found understanding.
 
Some things collapse because people stop caring for them.
 
Some things collapse because life wears people down faster than love can repair them.
 
And some things — churches, marriages, hearts — survive longer than anyone realizes, even after they begin breaking apart.
 
She looked back toward the pew where she had been sitting.
 
Their pew.
 
For years, she had only remembered the ending of her marriage. The coldness. The silence. The unbearable emptiness.
 
But sitting there tonight, she remembered the beginning, too.
 
And maybe that mattered.
 
Maybe ruined things were still worthy of mourning because once, they had been beautiful.
 
Evelyn placed the photograph on the altar beneath the old cross. Then she turned toward the doorway.
 
Rain waited beyond it, soft and endless.
 
“Goodbye,” she whispered.
 
This time, she meant it.

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@shphys this is painfully beautiful


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The Pretty Doll by SlyPigglet3

 

A little orphan named Daisy had a pretty little doll named Butterfly. Daisy lived in a church hidden by the forest, the church was very, very old. The church housed orphans and the nuns took very good care of them. One day all the girls went outside to play, but when Daisy went back to the church, Butterfly was missing! Daisy looked all over for Butterfly but couldn’t find her. Daisy went out the next day and sat in the shade of a big tree. She looked beside her and saw Butterfly! Daisy skipped all the way back to the church and sat beside a beautiful stained glass window. Then she placed Butterfly across from her and had a tea party.

The End


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Susanna’s Surprise by SlyPigglet5

 

Once upon a time there was a girl and her name was Susanna. Every day she went to a hidden church so she could think. One day a group of monkeys with fire burned the hidden church down. But a unicorn came to her rescue! Susanna and the unicorn became best friends. And they lived happily ever after. 

 

The End


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Fortune’s Story by SlyPigglet1 (week 4)

 

This is the story of how I found my dog, Fortune. It had been a warm summer evening and I was walking through a church ruin partly concealed by the local flora. Even though the church was decayed, it was a wonder to walk through. There was a stone pew, lying on its side in the leaf litter. Bits and pieces of stained glass in stone arches that reached to the treetops glittered like jewels in the sunset. It was magical to behold. That evening I had gone to enjoy the warm weather and get inspiration for the next book I was going to write. I was sitting on one of the pews when I heard a small sound. At first I dismissed it as a bird call, but it became louder and more persistent, eventually becoming undeniably a dog’s whimper. I got up and started looking for it, under pews and stone ledges until I finally found the source of the sound. It was a small dog, not much more than a puppy, really, and it had been curled up in a corner of the church behind a wall of climbing ivy. I picked it up and it lifted its face and licked me. I giggled and said, “Well, hello there!” It wagged its tail. 

I took a quick peek between its hind legs. “So you’re a boy, huh? Well, it sure was your good fortune that I was here, little guy. I wonder who you belong to.” He licked me again. 

I carried him to my car and took him to an animal shelter nearby to have him checked for a microchip or a clue to whom he belonged to. They took him and inspected him while I waited in the lobby. They came back saying he was completely healthy, but as far as they knew, he didn’t belong to anybody. 

“It’s really quite sad,” the lady at the front desk said. “Some people just toss a dog away when they don’t want it anymore. We’ll just have to keep this little guy here until someone comes to adopt him.”

I looked down at the small ball of fluff now laying on my feet. “I’ll take him.” I said before I realized it. 

The lady at the front desk smiled and talked me through the process of adopting a dog. I signed some papers and walked out the door a proud owner of the dog I had decided to call Fortune. 

We stopped by PetSmart to buy dog food and then headed home. It was late evening when we arrived home, so I fixed us some dinner and we went to bed. The next morning after I walked Fortune I sat down at my computer to do some writing. I glanced down to where Fortune was draped over my feet and smiled. I began typing: 

“FORTUNE’S STORY”

“Yes,” I thought, looking down at my fluffball, “Fortune’s story.”

 

The End


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